Those Elastics

19 Jan



Sorry, this must be one of those brushes for a bald man.

He laughed, sort of, his breath soursweet. At least he was up. He would remember this.

There. How’s that? He always asked. She never answered. It was lumpy. It would hurt to take the rubber band out and do it again. Mom always used a scrunchy. All Dad could find now were elastics, like the one that closed the oversized Walmart bag that held her Cheez Whiz on white. She knew the lunch monitor would help her with the elastic after she fixed her ponytail.

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12 Responses to “Those Elastics”

  1. mj monaghan January 19, 2012 at 11:38 pm #

    I really like your style. You pack a punch in few words. Succinct and descriptive.

  2. mj monaghan January 20, 2012 at 7:37 pm #

    Patricia, I highlighted you on my latest blog post – Top 10!

  3. Andra Watkins January 21, 2012 at 4:02 am #

    Where selective memory is a girl’s best friend. Best. Tag. Line. EVER.

    • Patricia DeWit January 21, 2012 at 5:01 am #

      …and choosing to select the good gives FREEDOM! Thanks for coming by.

  4. She's a Maineiac January 21, 2012 at 1:07 pm #

    You have such a way with words, the story sucked me right in.

    • Patricia DeWit January 25, 2012 at 10:19 am #

      Thanks so much for coming by and taking the time to read.

  5. Arindam January 23, 2012 at 5:16 am #

    You told a wonderful story, with few words.

    • Patricia DeWit January 25, 2012 at 10:20 am #

      It’s not easy. Lots of edits to get down to only 420 characters. Thanks for the kind words.

  6. Jesse Jaca January 24, 2012 at 12:18 pm #

    love this shot. always love reflection shots.

  7. Barb January 24, 2012 at 7:12 pm #

    Took a moment and a reread, but then I was able to follow your mind. Lovey, terse, compact meanings in stories loaded with layers. Very nice.

    • Patricia DeWit January 25, 2012 at 10:22 am #

      Ya, in such a limited amount of words I have to give lots of hints and sometimes they don’t come together until the end. Thanks so much for coming by!

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